Two magpies warbling
in the sunny day
soar across my street,
my little hill street
beneath the mountain
and the great clear sky.
In all the gardens
lining my calm street,
trees and more trees reach
high and wide. There is
an ease, a leisure,
in their space, their spread.
The magpies, too, are
blithely unhurried
although gone too soon
with their liquid song,
guided by instinct
as their lives require.
They won’t go as far
as the mountain. That
is home to eagles.
Those, I love to watch
riding the currents
of the lofty winds.
But that’s memory:
an earlier street
the other mountain
and my love, who was
alive then, watching
beside me, smiling.
This town surrounded
by mountains and birds,
and everywhere trees,
delights me daily.
In the long nights, still,
I know myself blessed.
Sharing with Friday Writings #143 at Poets and Storytellers United.
Off prompt. Instead I'm pinching a recent form prompt from dVerse: the tableau poetry style. (The instructions say 5 beats per line, but examination reveals them to be not beats but syllables. Beats in a line of poetry are usually understood as the stressed syllables.)
I love how this conveys both the intimate world and the wider world - Jae
ReplyDeleteI love how you see both in it.
DeleteThe fond memory placed in the middle of the serenity of words and place... lovely...
ReplyDeleteThank you. It unfolded naturally in the writing. I'm glad it works.
DeleteLyrical lines taking us to that other mountain and two other magpies warbling, you and your love. :)
ReplyDeleteThis is great and i love the zythum - it really works
ReplyDeleteThank you. Could you please explain what that word means? It's very hard to look up!! (I'm pretty sure you don't mean it as an ancient Egyptian beer.) I'd love to know what it is that I have done which works so well.
DeleteYes the closure is ultimate. The feelings of being blessed.
ReplyDeleteBeats / stresses / syllables /... I misread and / or ignored the guidepost post & just wrote, hoping the mixed mix-up would Meet The Bar at least half as nicely as you've done here. Cool work indeed, Rosemary. Thanks!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Ron. I actually didn't join in at dVerse myself, not having a lot of time to spare; just borrowed the idea. Perhaps I should have a look and see what you and others did with it.
DeleteYou 'painted' the perfect picture of your surroundings, Rosemary! I love your street, the blue sky and the mountain vista.
ReplyDeleteYou can see why I consider myself blessed to be here!
DeleteStay blessed. Luv your poem.
ReplyDeletemuch♡love
Thanks, Gillena! Love to you too.
Deleteyou made good use of the tableau style Rosemary - pictorial for time and place and then that sudden flashback and the touch of sorrow - the magpies are the first hint. Thanks for joining even though you are pressed for time
ReplyDelete"although gone too soon
with their liquid song"
I so enjoyed writing to this form, and reading what others did with it!
DeleteClose-up and long-range view, present and past memories, bigger and smaller birds. Nice!
ReplyDelete("Zythum" sounds like zydeco rhythm to me, but I don't think that's it either.)
PK
Thanks!
Delete(And maybe zythum was a typo for rhythm?)
At first I thought you were going to say that the magpies make you scream! Lol. I know they do scare some people. Your poem wasn't scary or unpleasant though.
ReplyDeleteThat last comment about being afraid of magpies was from me. I forgot to change the anonymous before sending.
ReplyDeleteI am wary of them in the nesting season, not wishing to be dive-bombed! But I do very much love the music of the Australian magpies.
DeleteLove the opening images with the magpies and their liquid songs. We are indeed blessed to enjoy nature's blessings - from mountains, to birds and trees. Thanks for joining in from dVerse. Wishing you a good weekend.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Grace. I wish the same to you; and I'm glad this aroused fellow-feeling in you.
DeleteMurwillumbah is a lovely town...nice photos...like the form as well...Rall
DeleteYes. It is quite a lot busier than you would recall, I think; harder to find parking spots! But otherwise not much changed.
DeleteI found the form quite delightful to try, and will probably return to it now and then.
You brought me to your town. There is an air of serenity and peace in the words, the quiet and open spaces I find lacking in an urban environment.
ReplyDeleteI have still lived longer in the city of Melbourne than anywhere else, though this place is fast catching up – but I would not at all like to go back to big city living now.
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ReplyDeletei can relate to most of that!
Murwillumbah has always reminded me quite a lot of the Launceston I grew up in – though, thankfully, warmer!
DeleteSplendid surroundings, Rosemary!
ReplyDeleteYes, aren't they?
DeleteLove how much you can tell both of content and sorrow with such a keen eye observing the world around you.
ReplyDeleteAs you can see, I very much enjoy my part of the world.
DeleteI so enjoyed the tableau of your street, Rosemary, and thank you for the guided tour. Two magpies for joy is a good omen to start with, and you’re fortunate to live near a mountain, surrounded by trees. There’s a lot to be said for living at a slow pace, slow enough to watch the birds.
ReplyDeleteYes indeed – especially as one ages and the pace slows in any case.
DeleteAbsolutely beautiful, Rosemary! If only we took notes from birds “with their liquid song,
ReplyDeleteguided by instinct”❤️
Thanks, Melissa. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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