I think about you: American sentences


I think about you: American sentences

(Observations on the foibles of human behaviour – more senryu than haiku-like – these are meant to be read separately, not as a sequence.)


My past relationships taught me love has many forms and many ways.

How difficult and hard to reach she has become since her bereavement.

That girl with the sweet voice is always using it to stir up trouble.

They contest the will, wanting to hang on to more of their dead father.

It’s not that I’m still grief-struck – just that I think about you all the time.

Comments

  1. The last one nearly broke my heart. It might be the reason behind the laughter (which usually leaves my mouth) when I hear someone says that times dulls all things. Some things, maybe... but others... well, one just can't help thinking about them "all the time."

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    1. Yes, that's on a par with 'You'll get over it.' One never really does.

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  2. These words resonate with more than usual since my grandfather passed away last week quite suddenly.
    Especially this - How difficult and hard to reach she has become since her bereavement.

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    1. My condolences to you. Grief is a long and varied journey.

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  3. You convey the suggestion of much larger stories in this brief sentences. That is an art.

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  4. Oh these are so hard to do and you've got into the groove... I tried them once and well.. struggled :)

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    1. I quite like them, but I agree they are not all that easy.

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  5. I really like American sentences and their many possibilities. Your selection here, Rosemary, is wonderful and wise when read individually, but I like to think of them as fragments of a story, waiting to be pieced together. The last one choked me up, especially as it was the third anniversary of my mother’s death this week.

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    1. My sympathies. After only three years, grief is still very new.

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  6. I totally agree with Kerry Rosemary.

    The middle sentence reminds me of someone I know...
    Anna :o]

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  7. Each one a separate story - so poignant and insightful

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  8. These moments are part of life and they make us what we are.

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  9. All wonderful senryu / sentences indeed. #1 speaks most directly to my own experience. (I been around some).

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  10. These are so poignant, Rosemary! The last one left me clutching my heart. Grief is a process and a long journey. We never truly forget.

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  11. I will have to try an American Sentence Poem. I don't think I ever have. I love them all but the third sentence really struck me with the whole mean girl culture and mentality.

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  12. My past relationships taught me
    love has many forms and many ways.

    The beauty of many relationships is that one comes away wiser at the end of each one of them. It's a learning process being enjoyed when it lasted!

    Hank

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  13. Beautifully touching American Sentences Rosemary.

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  14. Each one of these resonates in the heart and mind. I pictured a person in my life with each line but the last one, I pictured myself. I experience grief in my life but to say I understand is incorrect. I don't know your experiences well enough to say that, Rosemary. I hope that your pathway through grief allows you to be a stronger person. I wish you well.

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  15. They all lead, set up the last line. I like the format.

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  16. Stirrer of trouble, may your voice turn harsh so that you are no longer able to trick people!

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  17. All of these reflect thoughts we can relate to, especially grief. Probably they can all evolve into a longer poem or story. I like all of these and am envious of your creative expression. I think I may try writing these, but I find Haiku such a difficult form that I imagine writing senryu is just as difficult (for me).
    I so much enjoyed reading these.

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  18. "That girl with the sweet voice is always using it to stir up trouble."

    This one i like best. Par excellence for its irony

    Happy Sunday

    Much✏❤✏love

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  19. Astonished at how succinct each is and how they resonate!

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  20. I am reminded of working on character sheets for novels--these feel much more to-the-point and expressive.

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  21. All of them are so much more than the simple sentence, like the fact that they each are also a character portrait.

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  22. I loved the simplicity and ease of these--their compactness speaks to the expressiveness of each brushstroke you use here

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  23. You rocked this format. These all say so much in their brief space - especially that last one. It doesn't matter how much time goes by, grief can still swallow a person whole.

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  24. I like all of these, Rosemary. You are right, one never does "get over" the loss of a spouse. Get somewhat better than the grief but the feeling for loss remains.
    Thank you for reading my efforts while I've been gone. I wish to apologize for not always returning your comments. I hope to tell of my absence experiences when I can make them fit in. The Sabbatical ends this week.
    ..

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  25. Wonderful observations. And thank goodness for the girl in the middle!

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  26. This poem really resonates with me. My oldest daughter lost in the love of her life in September. Cancer is a beast.

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  27. For what we assume to be the most advanced form of life on Earth we have little understanding of our own emotions. I wonder why we are embarrassed when we make a mistake or shy when we meet someone that is extremely attractive and may even blush. If I was a dog I would go straighht up to that beautiful bitch and start licking her, hoping she ewoulkd start prancing around hoping we could play chasey so we really get to know each other!

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  28. Writing an AS with nuance is an art. You have truly nuanced this form. The last one is heartbreaking.

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  29. I enjoyed all of them especially the reason for contesting the will.Guffaws!

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  30. I really like all of these. That last one -- it resonates with me.

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