I think about you: American sentences
(Observations on the foibles of human behaviour – more senryu than haiku-like – these are meant to be read separately, not as a sequence.)
My past relationships taught me love has many forms and many ways.
How difficult and hard to reach she has become since her bereavement.
That girl with the sweet voice is always using it to stir up trouble.
They contest the will, wanting to hang on to more of their dead father.
They contest the will, wanting to hang on to more of their dead father.
It’s not that I’m still grief-struck – just that I think about you all the time.
The last one nearly broke my heart. It might be the reason behind the laughter (which usually leaves my mouth) when I hear someone says that times dulls all things. Some things, maybe... but others... well, one just can't help thinking about them "all the time."
ReplyDeleteYes, that's on a par with 'You'll get over it.' One never really does.
DeleteThese words resonate with more than usual since my grandfather passed away last week quite suddenly.
ReplyDeleteEspecially this - How difficult and hard to reach she has become since her bereavement.
My condolences to you. Grief is a long and varied journey.
DeleteYou convey the suggestion of much larger stories in this brief sentences. That is an art.
ReplyDeleteOh these are so hard to do and you've got into the groove... I tried them once and well.. struggled :)
ReplyDeleteI quite like them, but I agree they are not all that easy.
DeleteI really like American sentences and their many possibilities. Your selection here, Rosemary, is wonderful and wise when read individually, but I like to think of them as fragments of a story, waiting to be pieced together. The last one choked me up, especially as it was the third anniversary of my mother’s death this week.
ReplyDeleteMy sympathies. After only three years, grief is still very new.
DeleteI totally agree with Kerry Rosemary.
ReplyDeleteThe middle sentence reminds me of someone I know...
Anna :o]
Each one a separate story - so poignant and insightful
ReplyDeleteThese moments are part of life and they make us what we are.
ReplyDeleteAll wonderful senryu / sentences indeed. #1 speaks most directly to my own experience. (I been around some).
ReplyDeleteThese are so poignant, Rosemary! The last one left me clutching my heart. Grief is a process and a long journey. We never truly forget.
ReplyDeleteI will have to try an American Sentence Poem. I don't think I ever have. I love them all but the third sentence really struck me with the whole mean girl culture and mentality.
ReplyDeleteMy past relationships taught me
ReplyDeletelove has many forms and many ways.
The beauty of many relationships is that one comes away wiser at the end of each one of them. It's a learning process being enjoyed when it lasted!
Hank
Beautifully touching American Sentences Rosemary.
ReplyDeleteEach one of these resonates in the heart and mind. I pictured a person in my life with each line but the last one, I pictured myself. I experience grief in my life but to say I understand is incorrect. I don't know your experiences well enough to say that, Rosemary. I hope that your pathway through grief allows you to be a stronger person. I wish you well.
ReplyDeleteThey all lead, set up the last line. I like the format.
ReplyDeleteStirrer of trouble, may your voice turn harsh so that you are no longer able to trick people!
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ReplyDeleteAll of these reflect thoughts we can relate to, especially grief. Probably they can all evolve into a longer poem or story. I like all of these and am envious of your creative expression. I think I may try writing these, but I find Haiku such a difficult form that I imagine writing senryu is just as difficult (for me).
I so much enjoyed reading these.
ReplyDelete"That girl with the sweet voice is always using it to stir up trouble."
This one i like best. Par excellence for its irony
Happy Sunday
Much✏❤✏love
Astonished at how succinct each is and how they resonate!
ReplyDeleteI am reminded of working on character sheets for novels--these feel much more to-the-point and expressive.
ReplyDeleteAll of them are so much more than the simple sentence, like the fact that they each are also a character portrait.
ReplyDeleteAll very enlightening.
ReplyDeleteI loved the simplicity and ease of these--their compactness speaks to the expressiveness of each brushstroke you use here
ReplyDeleteYou rocked this format. These all say so much in their brief space - especially that last one. It doesn't matter how much time goes by, grief can still swallow a person whole.
ReplyDeleteI like all of these, Rosemary. You are right, one never does "get over" the loss of a spouse. Get somewhat better than the grief but the feeling for loss remains.
ReplyDeleteThank you for reading my efforts while I've been gone. I wish to apologize for not always returning your comments. I hope to tell of my absence experiences when I can make them fit in. The Sabbatical ends this week.
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Wonderful observations. And thank goodness for the girl in the middle!
ReplyDeleteThis poem really resonates with me. My oldest daughter lost in the love of her life in September. Cancer is a beast.
ReplyDeleteFor what we assume to be the most advanced form of life on Earth we have little understanding of our own emotions. I wonder why we are embarrassed when we make a mistake or shy when we meet someone that is extremely attractive and may even blush. If I was a dog I would go straighht up to that beautiful bitch and start licking her, hoping she ewoulkd start prancing around hoping we could play chasey so we really get to know each other!
ReplyDeleteWriting an AS with nuance is an art. You have truly nuanced this form. The last one is heartbreaking.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed all of them especially the reason for contesting the will.Guffaws!
ReplyDeleteI really like all of these. That last one -- it resonates with me.
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