little movement … near silence …
some melodic bird song …
a fly comes and goes …
I imagine
the temperature of the sun,
the feel of that light breeze
in my hair
Image copyright © Denis Robinson 2025
This is a textu (160 characters including title and spaces) and also a found poem / erasure poem. My brother Denis posted a video on his facebook page of leaves moving. (See, above, the still screenshot.) The first verse of this is taken from his words about it; the second from my comment on it.
I'm sharing this with Open Link Night #395 at dVerse, where the optional mini-prompt is letter writing, including modern digital equivalents – posts and comments on facebook being one form of the latter.
Love it A peaceful moment, a pause
ReplyDeleteExactly!
DeleteI love the creation process as much as the poem itself.
ReplyDeleteThat's nice!
DeleteAs much as we spot flies away, they do carry a memory of summer!
ReplyDeleteIn the video it was just a sound, which my brother identified for those who looked at the post.
DeleteA breath of the halcyon, so gently replied.
ReplyDelete*Smile*
DeleteA new form for me, Rosemary, and I love that it is a found poem – I haven’t written one of those in a while – and that it’s from your brother’s words, and how you captured the moment and then added your own thoughts.
ReplyDeleteThis was one I particularly enjoyed creating.
DeleteA delightful space and moment!
ReplyDeleteYes indeed.
DeleteSuch a unique form / poem, the factors that made it such .... the sibling connection. I love it.
ReplyDeleteI did particularly love creating this one.
DeleteA refreshing little slice of life, Rosemary, and I love how the last line leads you perfectly into the image where you can imagine that breeze in your own hair - lovely. Never heard of the Textu form! How interesting 🙂
ReplyDeleteInvented fairly recently by Palestinian-American poet and physician Fady Joudah, who has a whole book of them.
DeleteOne cool creation process Rosemary, found poem, and a Textu to boot... And its a lovely poem after all that!
ReplyDeleteThank you. So nice when it all comes together and works!
Deletebeautiful image of a moment, in screen shot and in words.
ReplyDeleteSo glad you enjoyed it.
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