I live in a cul-de-sac at the top of a hill.
At night I hear silence, an occasional dog.
Inside I have non-stop jazz on late.
I leave the passage light on, not to trip over.
All night I hear silence, an occasional dog,
and my black, nocturnally wandering cat.
I leave the passage light on, not to trip over her.
Time stretches out vast in the early hours.
Watching my black, nocturnally wandering cat,
I feel my skin start to breathe, my back straighten.
Time stretches out vast in the early hours.
I must go to bed, I tell myself, but I don’t.
I feel my skin start to breathe, my back straighten
inside the non-stop jazz I have on late.
I must go to bed, I tell myself, but I don’t.
The cul-de-sac is alive, here at the top of the hill.
Inspired by a prompt from Padraig O Tuama at the Poetry Unbound substack. He has some novel instructions for creating a pantoum. (This is an unrhymed pantoum, which is not traditional, but in my reading I notice it's becoming a common variant.) I must have subscribed to this substack at some point – and how glad I am that I did – as this post turned up in my email today. How could I possibly resist giving his method a try?
At Poets and Storytellers United, Friday Writings #209 asks us to be inspired by the following quote by Arthur Ashe: ‘Start where you are. Use what you have. Do what you can.’ While I didn't write this poem specifically to that prompt, its creation and subject matter exemplify the advice.
As a matter of interest, my original lines in response to O Tuama's prompt questions were:
I am in a cul-de-sac at the top of a hill.
At night I hear silence, an occasional dog.
Inside I have non-stop jazz on late.
I leave the passage light on, not to trip over
my black, nocturnally wandering cat.
Time stretches out vast in the early hours.
I feel my skin start to breathe, my back straighten.
I must go to bed, I tell myself, but I don’t.
(Not a bad little poem in itself, as it happens – but I do think the pantoum version is more interesting.)

Very novel . Enjoyed.
ReplyDeleteGood!
DeleteThat was fun! So creative. I don't go to bed either.
ReplyDeleteI do ... but MUCH later than most people.
DeleteThank you for introducing me to a new form. It came out really well!
ReplyDeleteHave fun exploring it for yourself!
DeleteI couldn't help but smile through reading. Finding our home and our place in it and having the freedom to listen to jazz at your time and enjoy the music - that seems like being fearlessly and contentedly - Jae
ReplyDeleteI'm glad I raised a smile! I suppose I am fearless in some ways, though I seldom think of myself that way. Certainly my life is free and contented, as the result of both fate and choice.
DeleteMay you always dance in words and jazz! - Jae
ReplyDeleteWhat a wonderful wish! Thank you, and I fervently echo it.
DeleteI identify with your lines,
Delete"Time stretches out vast in the early hours.
I must go to bed, I tell myself, but I don’t."
Mrs Jim has been asleep more than an hour and I am here reading theading the various responses. I am dressed for sleep, she is not. (BTW,we have down sized and have moved to a nearby Senior Living apartment. )
My brother (4 years younger than me) recently moved to a Senior Living unit and seems very happy there. I wish you joy in your new home.
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