(haiku)
1.
harvest moon
great wheel riding the sky
keeps pace with us
2.
the moon’s face
smiled in through my window
all my childhood
3.
stormy moon
on a wild ride half-glimpsed
through shadowy clouds
4.
I’m with Omar:
Ah, moon of my delight
that knows no wane!
5.
after the night
I keep within me the moon’s
persistent light
6.
morning –
the moon sinks from the sky
into the sea
7.
dark night –
without that bright face
I’m lonely
8.
full moon
in a ring of clouds
gazing back
9.
daylight moon
ethereal as cloud
ghostly on blue
10.
the moon –
even in a sliver
fully present
This came from an exercise: to write 10 haiku about the moon, then remove the word 'moon' everywhere and craft a new poem from what remains. I did, but I liked this haiku sequence better than my final poem.
(NB: The plural of 'haiku' is 'haiku'.)
Sharing (off-prompt) with Poets and Storytellers United at Friday Writings #215 .
What an achievement to write ten haikus about the moon - it is hard to choose a favourite. They all shine brightly - Jae
ReplyDeleteThanks, Jae, I'm glad they all work.
DeleteI think Number 8 is my favourite but they are all good.
ReplyDeleteThanks, I'm glad you like them.
DeleteIf I had to choose one Nr 10 resonates the most but I love the whole series of moon Haiku's
ReplyDeleteNo need to choose! I'm glad you love the whole series.
Delete(That being said, and having got to know you somewhat over the years of sharing poems, it doesn't surprise me that you particularly like #10. And it's probably the one that speaks for me the most, too.)
DeleteNice haiku poem. I like the second verse most I had in common with. Growing upwe had a two bedroom house. My little sister got the second and I slept out on the screened in front porch. Lots of moonlight shining in.
ReplyDeleteWe had a house on a sloping block, so the front was one storey and the back two. My bedroom being towards the back of the house, my window was high up and uncurtained.
DeleteTen Haiku's with moon as the central theme is a great feat in itself. I love the second one the most ... very nostalgic and full of hope. Took me back in time.
ReplyDelete"the moon’s face
smiled in through my window
all my childhood"
You're right, it was very nostalgic; also the moon felt like a reassuring presence to child me.
DeleteOh lovely... 4.6.7, 10 especially... 10 most of all, I think, but there's Omar!! Wonderful set..!!!
ReplyDeleteI'm glad you enjoyed them so much, Rajani! And that you have some fellow-feeling re Omar. (And I'm glad #10 arrived as the final one, where I think it's well-placed.)
DeleteEach is so lovely ~~~ but number seven stole my heart.
ReplyDeleteThat's sweet – thank you.
DeleteThose are nice, and I'm fascinated by the exercise! If we're picking favorites, mine is #3.
ReplyDeleteHa ha, it appears that everyone IS picking favourites, so I'm glad to add yours to the list. I'm even gladder to note that it seems they all have appeal.
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