The Knowing
Down in my bones I feel,
deeply, the stir of truth –
lighter than a pinprick,
fainter than a whisper,
easy to miss or ignore;
not so much a voice
as an echo,
not so much a ripple
as a shiver,
lasting a moment only
unless I stop
and pay attention –
when it responds,
rising, swelling,
making a murmur
and finally filling
my whole body:
lifting my arm, my hand,
moving my legs and feet,
speaking through my throat
with the resonance
of the absolute,
the clarity
of a slicing knife,
the directness of the heart.
Written in response to Weekly Scribblings #50: 'Down In My Bones' at Poets and Storytellers United.
Ya nailed it Rosemary. Perfect use of actual prompt in opener, followed by some fine verse all the way to and beyond that slicing knife clarity. Well done.
ReplyDeletea fine final stanza to follow a well-crafted progression ~
ReplyDeleteWonderful, Rosemary! I love the gentle movements in this poem: the stir of truth, the ripple and shiver, rising and swelling, and the surprise of the slicing knife. Truth can be easy to miss or ignore, which is why we must be attuned to movement.
ReplyDeleteIf in our lives we are constantly observing we should never have trouble writing poetry and prose as in our lives we should live with pout eyes open all the time and putting what we see away as could well come in useful.
ReplyDelete"lighter than a pinprick,
ReplyDeletefainter than a whisper, "
Luv this stirring of truth
Much💗love
Beautifully crafted, it felt tsunami like in its ability to wash over me !! I've been listening to the old recordings of the Daly Wilson Big Band ... my Oz friend played bass guitar in the band. Lifted my spirits immensely, that old jazz gets into my old bones.
ReplyDelete"not so much a ripple
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I love that.
I believe my inner voice speaks truth, and the signal time I ignored it I paid dearly, so yes, we need to take time to listen. Well penned, Rosemary.
ReplyDeleteI love the progression, Rosemary. How we get to see the ideas build as the speaker feels them, how we walk with her from first line to ending... where the truth fills us all (if we let it). I hope lots and lots of people do let it.
ReplyDeleteFeel the truth and live it. Nothing else matters so much.
ReplyDeleteRosemary, you have made "truth" of the writer so very real to the reader. I loved reading along.
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I love, love the rise of emotion here. Maybe it's just me, but it has the feel of a song, perhaps a hymn, were the singing is soft and delicate and builds to a hundred person chorus, rich with harmony and filling every cell with the power of its song. Hallelujah!
ReplyDeleteThe little voice...feint almost inaudible...must listen to it or perish.
ReplyDelete... the moment of recognition. Lovely.
ReplyDeletePerfect last stanza, Rosemary. We know the truth somewhere deep down in our bones.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful poem, so well expressed.
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