in this time
of wars and disasters
eclipsing other horrors
today’s rain and thunder
seems only fitting
I am glad to huddle indoors
sadly, to huddle indoors
only seems fitting –
today’s rain and thunder
not eclipsing other horrors:
the wars, the disasters
of this time
A double cherita, written for dVerse Meeting the Bar: A revisit with the Cherita. (The cherita is meant to tell a story; I hope this almost plotless piece qualifies!)
Rosemary, your Cherita tells a story ~ a true story. Well done!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Helen, glad you think so.
DeleteBeautifully expressed, Rosemary! Sometimes we need to regroup and huddle in the midst of so much horrible.
ReplyDeleteThank you; yes.
DeleteI like the very subtle omission in the shadow poem that shifts its meaning.
ReplyDeleteThank you; and I love that you see it as a 'shadow poem'.
DeleteIn this time, indeed. There is much to ponder.
ReplyDeleteToo much!
DeleteRosemary, I like how you slightly change the wording from the first to the second to significantly shift the meaning. Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteThanks; it was a good inspiration.
DeleteI'm with you.
ReplyDeleteI am sure we are far from alone.
DeleteVery well- crafted—the mirror effect, but not quite, is so powerful, and of course the theme too true... (Ain)
ReplyDeleteMany thanks.
DeleteSadly, a true story, Rosemary, that we are all witnessing. I’m always glad to huddle indoors.
ReplyDeleteThere are some days that are particularly conducive.
DeleteBeautifully expressed 🙌
ReplyDeleteThank you.
DeleteOh,... such storms are alas just a temporary distraction...
ReplyDeleteAlas.
DeleteSadly too much wars and disasters. I will take the rain and thunder.
ReplyDeleteI agree.
DeleteThere is no hiding from the sadness and pain in the world, unfortunately. But there is comfort in knowing that storms eventually pass.
ReplyDeleteTrue.
DeleteGive me the rain and thunder any time. Excellent double, Rosemary!
ReplyDeleteYes, rain and thunder can count as pleasures, and as practical benefits.
DeleteLove what you did there with the form! It's a powerfully poignant poem.
ReplyDeleteThank you; your comment delights me.
DeleteRosemary, I feel that shift from the comfort of huddling indoors to the weight of everything beyond the window—it’s quietly powerful.
ReplyDeleteMuch love,
David
SkepticsKaddish.com
Thanks, David.
DeleteSometimes I need the huddling indoors under the cozy blanket of rest before I can return to the challenges of this world. It can wear me down.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed your poem. Thank you for sharing it.
Thank you for reading it. And yes, I think most of us share that need with you. (Please reply again and tell me who you are, which Google Blogger failed to do.)
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