NaHaiWriMo 2019 week 4
The final week of this year's NaHaiWriMo month.
I found the prompts this year difficult to use to attempt true haiku. (If these succeed at all, I'd call them senryu.) I'd sooner take my inspiration from the natural world around me. But NaHaiWriMo aims to inspire a daily haiku habit, and in that respect succeeded with me, by showing me how I prefer to approach haiku and that I would like to do so, if not daily at least a lot more often.
#22 nearsightedness
The final week of this year's NaHaiWriMo month.
I found the prompts this year difficult to use to attempt true haiku. (If these succeed at all, I'd call them senryu.) I'd sooner take my inspiration from the natural world around me. But NaHaiWriMo aims to inspire a daily haiku habit, and in that respect succeeded with me, by showing me how I prefer to approach haiku and that I would like to do so, if not daily at least a lot more often.
#22 nearsightedness
labelled a snob –
until I get glasses
and see who’s who
#23 casserole
recipe says
cast iron dish –
my cauldron?
#24 school play
stumbling infants
brilliant on stage
by senior year
#25 hair brushing
100 strokes
night and morning …
the aunties lied
#26 bank account balance
pension day –
bills and groceries
balance zero
#27 canned meat
canned meat –
I turn
vegetarian
#28 school principal
Years later, ‘Look! it’s
Mr Wilson.’ Vague-eyed
he lifts his hat.
To be shared with Poets United's Poetry Pantry #442.
I call them senryu, too. I really like haiku, but... I love the human-energy senryu brings into the mix. Like your "canned meat" bit, it had me rolling with laughter, and saying, "Ye, me too!"
ReplyDeleteI'm thinking about a senryu, haiku, or tanka a day radiation (5-7 weeks). We'll see how it goes...
I love "the aunties lied." Reminds me of my mom saying "you have to suffer to be beautiful." I told my then eight year old great grandson that, then added " hmmm...i've suffered and i didnt become beautiful" and he replied very seriously "no. You didnt." Cracked me up.
ReplyDelete22 and 23 had me laughing. I no longer believe in 24, but the rest are all too true! Nicely done. So what is the difference between haiku and senryu? Is it a formality?
ReplyDeleteHaiku traditionally focus on the natural world, taking note of the seasons. Senryu deal with human behaviour. Of course, humans are part of nature and can be the subject of haiku – but senryu are also humorous, satirical or ironic.
DeleteI like your clever takes on these prompts. I especially smiled at the 'cauldron' and found myself nodding at the one about near-sightedness!
ReplyDeleteHa! I love the gentle humour and sweetness of these senryu/haiku. I really liked 24 and 27 in particular. Your witty take on these themes is plain delightful. :-)
ReplyDelete22 and 25 had me giggling and nodding at the same time.. it's amazing how quick other people are to judge us.. isn't it?❤️
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ReplyDeletenight and morning …
the aunties lied
..... that one especially made me smile!
Strong and gently insightful pieces here that were a treat to read this Sunday. Thank you...
ReplyDeleteThese are like doorway glimpses...some make me laugh (#27...#25) and others just bring a shiver of recognition.
ReplyDeleteYes, I definitely think you should use the cauldron! :)
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed your haikus...
ReplyDeleteLiteral LOL on 27. I've heard people say there are some creative ways to serve up something like Spam so that it's tasty, but I've never personally tried them myself.
ReplyDeleteI love the cauldron one too! Cracked me up.
ReplyDelete#26 sounds like my pay day...haha #25 do people actually brush their hair 100 strokes a day? Maybe?
ReplyDeleteI really like the wit of these short poems... sometimes real haiku becomes too much of a constriction... as for glasses, I got mine so early so I think now I'm snobbish about having them on.
ReplyDeleteI couldn't stifle a chuckle at the wordplay in:
ReplyDelete'labelled a snob –
until I get glasses
and see who’s who'!
Enchanting senryu - all of them with an unscripted backstory. Wonderful!
ReplyDeleteThese are enjoyable and clever haiku (or senryu) My favorites were nearsightedness and bank account balance, as I can relate to both.
ReplyDeleteHaiku, senyru, whatever is always a delight to read when so much is said and felt in so few words. My particular favorite was No 23 Casserole for the obvious reason.
ReplyDeletehaiku or senyru, no one's quibbling, because what your responses to the prompts are a delight to read. my favourite is #23, potions optional. :)
ReplyDeleteAunties lied is my favourite. Sort of like eating the crusts to get curly hair.
ReplyDeleteYes, there were quite a few lies.
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