We who with songs beguile your pilgrimage / And swear that Beauty lives though lilies die, / We Poets of the proud old lineage / Who sing to find your hearts, we know not why ... (James Elroy Flecker)

18.7.19

Summer Love #11: Heatwave



Heatwave
after the summer heat
raindrops kissing my naked body
Ah! that coolness

 © Chevrefeuille
At Carpe Diem Haiku Kai, we are asked to create a troiku from the above source haiku. Here is mine:
after the summer heat
we replace first one blanket
move closer together

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 raindrops kissing my naked body
my skin tautens in anticipation
I imagine your touch

            ******

 Ah! that coolness
the soft breeze in our hair
as we dance
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21 comments:

  1. Sherry Blue Sky18 July 2019 at 12:04

    Lovely!

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  2. Sherry Blue Sky11 August 2019 at 17:57

    These are perfection. Cool idea using a line each from the parent haiku to create three new ones.

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  3. Sanaa Rizvi11 August 2019 at 20:03

    Oh this is wonderful, Rosemary!💖💖

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  4. Jae Rose11 August 2019 at 20:17

    This is glorious..a real feast for the senses

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  5. Rommy11 August 2019 at 20:44

    Mmm...snapshots of loving. There's a lovely anticipation built into all three.

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  6. Old Egg11 August 2019 at 21:46

    Yes! Let my imagination run wild. Delightful troiku Rosemary.

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  7. C. Sandlin11 August 2019 at 22:36

    Love the way you've expanded the anticipation. And looking forward to blanket season, myself. :)

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  8. Truedessa11 August 2019 at 23:36

    These are lovely to read and beautiflly inspired by the first haiku. Ah, that coolness.

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  9. Jamztoma11 August 2019 at 23:44

    This was cute and sweet. Nice poem, Rosemary!

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  10. Magaly Guerrero12 August 2019 at 00:07

    I'm grinning like a lunatic right now. I love these glimpses into a healthy relationship with others and with self. I read them aloud to my Piano Man. And, oh dear, the look on his face... Yum!

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  11. tonispencer12 August 2019 at 02:30

    Delightful. I for one can hardly wait for cold weather to be here.

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  12. H. Hennenburg12 August 2019 at 03:06

    The little things we live for!

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  13. Linda Lee Lyberg12 August 2019 at 03:35

    So beautiful Rosemary!

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  14. Myrna R.12 August 2019 at 04:05

    I love your creativity. These are all precious.

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  15. Susan12 August 2019 at 08:01

    A fun take off on a line or three. Definitely, the weather makes a third partner in every close and sensual situation.

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  16. Gillena Cox12 August 2019 at 08:43

    You know i am a romantic so this troiku, hugs me
    Thank you for droppibg by my sumie Sunday today

    Much❤🕊❤love

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  17. Wendy Bourke12 August 2019 at 10:58

    Love the direction you went in with Chevrefeuille's haiku. These are stunning!

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  18. dsnake112 August 2019 at 14:15

    ah, delightful! and a bit naughty too. the scenes seem to move seamlessly from one haiku to the next.

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  19. Vivian Zems12 August 2019 at 18:18

    Marvellous! You painted a lovers' scene in a few words. :)

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  20. Magical Mystical Teacher15 August 2019 at 12:09

    So sensual!

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