Poetry Month, day 9
Waiting ... and Waiting
Waiting ... and Waiting
Days go by. Nothing!
I make up reasons.
Any or none might be true.
In the end it doesn't matter.
At first I was excited,
but as time lengthened
this turned to impatience
then dread, then despair.
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I am no longer waiting –
not for that. No, now
I await what I now await
with cold, bitter patience.
It will come, it will happen.
No matter when. I can wait!
That particular pleasure
intensifies with anticipation.
At "imaginary garden with real toads" we are asked to write a Waiting for.... poem which doesn't say what one is waiting for.
I can feel all of the emotions here. Waiting a long time for something special sometimes makes us lose the pleasure and become resigned and indifferent. Although here I see there is still hope.
ReplyDeleteWell, not exactly. Sort of, but.... Maybe I need to work on it a bit more, to convey one particular emotion better, without actually spelling it out.
DeleteChanged one word, hope it makes it clearer.
DeleteGotcha', I think :-) Sometimes I'm a bit of a brick,,
DeleteI got the feeling of waiting for something to arrive in the post - a letter or parcel from someone far away.
ReplyDeleteYes. That's the first half.
DeleteOh gosh, this is so intense! I can feel it (in ways I can't describe).. perhaps what we desire comes when we least expect it. Beautifully executed.💞
ReplyDeleteThat's the ultimate queue, isn't it, waiting for our number to be called. A precise description, and a great response to the challenge.
ReplyDeleteLuv the change of emotions involved in the process
ReplyDeleteMuch 🌼love
At least it's a good thing!
ReplyDeleteSome sort of promise was made ... but I can't figure out what it is.
ReplyDeleteI thought about news from afar but then wondered...what might turn from dread and despair to anticipation. A puzzle.
ReplyDeleteBeautifully done :)
ReplyDeleteEspecially loved the closing lines - knowing it will happen and we can wait, gives a calming feel.
I thin you were waiting for Selene to become purry! Love this Rosemary!
ReplyDeleteI think that would have been a sweeter poem. (Smile.)
DeleteI like that cold bitter patience. I know that feeling. Ha, I love Toni's comment. Smiles.
ReplyDeleteNo-one seems to have "got" the second half of the piece yet. I think the trouble is, (a) everyone thinks I am such a nice lady (b) people assume the protagonist of this poem is me. I meant to convey disappointment followed by vengefulness.
ReplyDeleteI am not sure I have quite got it, but the first part is waiting for something good and being disappointed because someone has broken their promise or failed to show up. The second half is waiting for vengeance, which is best eaten cold. Great poem.
ReplyDeleteYes! You got it! And, because of the delay in moderating comments, you would have guessed before I told. Ladies and gentlemen – the winner!
DeleteI really like how you use the two parts to portray the waiting and then the planning in lack of response. It was quite a clever turn. The two halves work nicely together, but might also stand nicely on their own as two poems! I also like how the first part is full of emotion and the second is more sure stead. Great writing!
ReplyDeleteNicely written, Rosemary. The first, with its long wait , will not have a good ending. Loss of a child perhaps. Young or older, serviceman quite often in times of war.
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Indeed, it is sufficiently non-specific that it could apply to that scenario ... or various others.
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